Thursday, January 21, 2010

55-running

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Black bird pierces
a steep strip scrawl
lacing through my striding.

Quails weave in
and out,
wob-wobbing,

Tipping chipping quipping
ahead behind above.
A syn-chron-ous city

Hum zum free,
buzz free see,
cricket breezes bees

Yee hee hee,
Harp yelp mark,
Coyotes? Dogs? Pups?

Too far away
Padding, padding
Hard, soft, ticking.

Stillness’s synonyms:
Synchronicity.
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Write a story or poem in 55 words or less, and let G-Man know:

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30 comments:

  1. Synchronicity indeed. That was lovely.

    I'm up right HERE

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  2. I love the sound of this and the fun of hearing myself read it aloud.

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  3. The full poem is extremely hard to read, and I'm trying it for the first time at our local poetry night tonight!

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  4. Great 55 Di.
    You sure love the out of doors!
    Synchronicity...




    (Have a Kick Ass Week-End)

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  5. Synchronised is a good state to be,

    Interesting poem, Diane :)

    wishes,
    devika

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  6. I agree with Karen; this is fun to read out loud. :)

    Thanks for doing Friday 55!
    You can read mine right here.

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  7. Devika,
    your blog is beautiful!
    The mango! I know in other countries we do not have the best version of your favorite fruit. It is a wealth, and only savored when ripe.

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  8. wicked cool 55. i love the outdoors as well. all just seems right in those moments.

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  9. Took a walk this morning did you and felt harmony with the world around? Wonderful.

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  10. Excellent....and the rhythm of it all is perfect.

    My 55 is HERE, scroll below my show n tell stuff.

    Happy Friday.

    the tag "here" as you asked on Mr. G's comments are done with an 'a href' code. Look it up on google and it'll show you. They're called hyperlinks...just google how to do hyperlinks, and it'll show you how.

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  11. Running can be soooo zen, eh? Nicely done!

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  12. there are sounds in your words. its great! good luck and fortune on poetry night!!!

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  13. Like a symphony. Thanks for stopping by to see me.

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  14. that is amazing, i had to read it twice it is beautiful!! great 55!! mine is up too!!

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  15. nice...from one nature lover to another. ☺

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  16. What a wonderful 55 to read aloud! I really enjoyed that.

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  17. Love all the natuer elements. Great 55.


    Mine is up Here

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  18. That was a fun read, great sentences, vivid descriptions of so many sounds.

    My 55 is HERE

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  19. Sounds of poetry
    resounding all over
    into the hearts

    the very poetry, thank you,Hidenori!

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  20. "Tipping chipping quipping
    ahead behind above.
    A syn-chron-ous city"
    love the 'musicality' in this verse

    much love
    gillena

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  21. I love all of this, Dianne. Wonderful sounds, perfect.

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  22. I love the sound-work here, Dianne. Playful and evocative. Especially the 'wob-wobbing" of the quails1

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  23. the sounds are what draw me in most of all.

    beauty dianne...

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  24. Hi, everyone,
    Dianne did a beautiful job reading the full poem Thursday night! It's a wonderful piece, a treat for the ears, and the images....

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  25. Thank you Chris, I really had to focus on the images because the words tried to twist on eachother!
    especially black bird pierces a steep strip scrawl, try saying that 3 times out loud ...(actually a good warm up for any orator, try it!)

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  26. This is what I call seriously playful. Translation: I like it.

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  27. Oh, frig, Dianne, the language in this is so much fun! Frick. Fricken fun! You had me at wob-wobbing and then it just got better and better.
    xo
    erin

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  28. I'm reading this a second time and it still shines. Can't wait to see your 55.

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