….And All the While I’m Thinking:
Pedals
turn, turn,
while
muscles
burn, burn.
Wheels
pace, pace,while
hearts
race, race.
Lungs
moan, moan,
while
pistoning
bones, bones.
Smiles
quirk, quirk,
while
lips
thirst, thirst.
Hands
ache, ache,
while
vistas
satiate, satiate.
Words
Pant, pant,
while
thoughts
rant, rant.
Eyes
meet, meet,
while
bodies
fleet, fleet.
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This is a poem in 55 exactly 55 words, a challenge from G-Man . If you want to meet the challenge, post a short story or poem, and let G-Man know HERE !
Too bad you posted late Di...
ReplyDeleteThis was one of THE very best contributions of the Day...Wow!
I loved your 55..
Very very talented mind....Thanks
Have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
Fabulous Dianne
Taking a break from Haiku
You Rock The Left Coast!!!
wow, diane...your 55 made me feel every motion possible, what a great job!
ReplyDeletevery nice...i feel like i am on the bicycle...love the repitition...and the cadence...great job!
ReplyDeleteWhere were you riding? I want to go there. Not on a bike though. This was a good poem, Di. You continually get better and better.
ReplyDeleteWay to go, Dianne, on your Dottie Dot Award!
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What and interesting and evocative technique you have used here Dianne...just wonderful.
ReplyDeletelove the repetition!
ReplyDeleteHow smart you are.
excellent 55.